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Mae 선생님과의 수업내용

2014.05.23 08:52

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저는 vocabulary 향상에 중점을 두고 수업을 받고 있습니다매주 금요일은  주에 배운 단어를 이용한 작문을하고  작문으로 수업을 받거나 또는 제가 작문을 하지 못했을 경우는 선생님이 시험 문제를 내주시고그것으로 수업을 받고 있습니다.

아래 내용은 제가 지난주에 작문으로 수업 받은 내용입니다엄청 부끄럽지만혹시나 다른 회원 분들께 도움이될까 싶어서 올려 봅니다  (참고로 파란색과 빨간색 단어들은 교정 받은 단어입니다.)

 

작문에 넣어야  필수 단어:

Consequence, Economics, Force, Killjoy, Reasonable, Regards, Rehearsing, Mentally challenge

Divert, Seriously, Intensely, Reveal, Terminally ill

 

내가 만든 엉성한 작문:

Yesterday, I went to the hospital since I had intense pain in my stomach.

So, I thought that I had a terminally ill in my stomach. It was intense sad day.

There was a big construction on the hospital, so, I had to divert the other hospital.

I found out the nice hospital and got a diagnosis. The doctor revealed my pain’s reason.

The reason was that I have been rehearsed for a demonstration every night without eating. 

I was mentally challenge because I couldn’t distinguish hungry and pain.

So, I paid for my diagnosis with reasonable price.

After I returned to home, I checked my lifestyle with my private economics.

And I realized I can do everything what I want.

As my consequence of my thought, I will make a plan to live in other country seriously.

Then, I will be a woman with strong force. haha

At the time, my husband told me to do something for house such as cleaning room.

So, I told him “ Are you killjoy?

 

교정  (Mae 선생님):

Yesterday, I went to the hospital because I had intense pain in my stomach.

So, I thought that I had a terminally ill  in my  stomach. It was an intense sad day.

There was a big construction at on the hospital, so, I had to divert to the other hospital.

I found  out  a the nice hospital and got a diagnosis. The doctor revealed found out the reason for my stomachache.

The reason was that I have been rehearsed rehearsing for a demonstration every night without eating. 

I was mentally challenged because I couldn’t distinguish hunger and pain.

So, I paid for my diagnosis with reasonable price.

After I returned to home, I checked my lifestyle with and my private economics.

And I realized I can do everything that I want.

As consequence of my thought, I will make a plan to live in other countries seriously.

Or As consequence of my thought, I will make a serious plan to live in other countries.

At that time, my husband told me to do household chores such as cleaning rooms.

So, I told him “ You are killjoy!”

 

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